Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/SMS Braunschweig

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Article promoted by Ian Rose (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 19:28, 23 December 2017 (UTC) « Return to A-Class review list[reply]

SMS Braunschweig edit

Nominator(s): Parsecboy (talk)

SMS Braunschweig (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Another one of my German battleship articles (we're nearing the end!) up for A-class review. This ship saw action in World War I at the Battle of the Gulf of Riga, but otherwise had a fairly quiet career that spanned almost 30 years (in the Imperial and Weimar navies). As always, thanks to those who review the article! Parsecboy (talk) 13:27, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments edit

  • No DABs
  • Lots of duplicate links.
    • While you were out, the standard dupe link checker went haywire - see here for the improved tool. Parsecboy (talk) 01:29, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Break out propulsion and power sections with appropriate links in the infobox. And tell readers that they're steam engines. And add boilers with links.
    • Done
  • Hyphenate triple expansion
    • Done
  • Link main battery, secondary armament, flagship
    • Done
  • Need a cite for the source of the name.
    • Hildebrand will cover that, but I don't have the book on hand at the moment, so I can't get the exact page number - will get to this later.
  • in Helsinki, Finland and Gothenburg, Sweden commas after Finland and Sweden
    • Done
  • Explain the abbreviation VAdm
    • Done
  • Nothing else catches my eye on this pass.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:26, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Iazyges edit

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 20:25, 14 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by PM edit

This article is in great shape. A few comments from me:

  • link Displacement (ship)
    • Done
  • is information available on the positioning of the TTs?
    • Will have to look, though my guess is that since it's not already in the class article, Groener and Conway's don't specify
  • the max and min belt armour differs between the body and infobox
    • Fixed
  • her range isn't provided or cited in the body
    • Added to the body
  • "named for the Duchy
    • Good catch
  • link ship commissioning
    • Done
  • "That yeahr"
    • Sturm got that
  • Ehrhard Schmidt should probably be just Schmidt on second occasion, per WP:SURNAME
    • Fixed
  • repetition "in the Baltic, owing to the threat from submarines in the Baltic" Trim?
    • Fixed
  • image review all ok, except for File:SMS Braunschweig NH 47693.tiff, which should probably have the NHHC tag
    • Done

That's me done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:28, 19 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Peacemaker! Parsecboy (talk) 18:34, 21 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support by AustralianRupert edit

G'day, Nate, nice work. I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 13:50, 22 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • "1921–22" --> "1921–1922" per WP:DATERANGE (in lead and postwar career section)
    • Fixed
  • "File:134 Kong Haakon VII forladende Tysk Panserskib Braunschweig - no-nb digifoto 20160209 00511 bldsa PK15135.jpg": would probably look more visually appealing if the border was cropped
    • Good idea - done
  • the infobox says the ship was scrapped in 1932, but I couldn't find 1932 mentioned specifically as the date in the article
    • Removed the year
  • Citation # 26 "Polmar & Noot, p. 44–45" --> "Polmar & Noot, pp. 44–45"
    • Good catch
  • the second entry (Gardiner) in the Further reading section is probably not necessary as it is already in the References
    • Fixed
  • there is a slight inconsistency in the hyphenation of the ISBN for the Dodson work (when compared to the other ISBNs)

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