Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/George Julian Howell
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George Julian Howell edit
- Passed --Eurocopter (talk) 18:10, 15 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I am requesting this article be reviewed for A-Class as I substantially expanded it a few weeks ago, and believe it now meets the A-Class criteria. Any and all comments welcome. Thanks, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 06:57, 6 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support; a well-written, although short article. I see no outstanding breaches of MoS. JonCatalán(Talk) 20:51, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I was originally reluctant to take this article to A-Class due to its size. However, this is probably one of the most comprehensive bios you will ever find on Howell, and I have seen shorter articles (including one or two of "mine") pass as A. Thanks for the support, Jon. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:24, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
CommentsSupport a very nice article and not far off supporting. A few comments however before I can give it a thumbs up.--Jackyd101 (talk) 23:27, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "During an attack on a German held village, he led a rifle bombing section (during the engagement)" - area in (parenthesis) is redundant.
- "Over the course of the next three days, severe fighting took place (between the two opposing sides),
while[and] further troops" - redundancy and phrasing - "Howell was to proform the acts" - typo?
- "hurriedly organised a group of non-combatants from headquarters" - I kknow you mean non-combatant soldiers, but I think it should be spelled out, it sounds almost like he coralled a bunch of nuns into the front line.
- "A fierce bombing and grenade fight soon [ensured] spelling (between the two parties), with [both sides suffering] heavy casualties (being inflicted upon each)"
- "along the trench firing burst from his Lewis Gun" - should it be bursts or is burst singular correct?
- "one of his brother's had also" - no apostrophe
- Thanks for the comments, Jacky. I think I have addressed all of the above issues, if not, I can have another look. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:24, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I've decided to support, although there is one remaining problem: The image of Howell receiving his medal intrudes on the VC citation below it. I suggest moving the image to the right side of the screen and up one paragraph to allieviate the problem (or seperate the ciation from the text in some way). Its an example of where I think the readability of the prose outweighs the alternating images, although it is by no means essential.--Jackyd101 (talk) 01:39, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The image doesn't conflict with the citation on my monitor, but I can move it up a paragraph if you like. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 01:50, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I've decided to support, although there is one remaining problem: The image of Howell receiving his medal intrudes on the VC citation below it. I suggest moving the image to the right side of the screen and up one paragraph to allieviate the problem (or seperate the ciation from the text in some way). Its an example of where I think the readability of the prose outweighs the alternating images, although it is by no means essential.--Jackyd101 (talk) 01:39, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support Looks excellent, couldn't find any major problems. – Joe Nutter 23:36, 12 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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