Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Requests/I Not Stupid Too

Reviewed the article 2/5/2008. Made comments regarding improvement of this article in its talk page. --Charleenmerced ^Talk 14:55, 20 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Copyedited by Lilipatina (talk), a member of the Guild of Copy Editors, on 05:22, 10 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have spent two months rewriting this article, and would appreciate some help in improving the prose (I Not Stupid's GA nomination failed due to choppy prose). --J.L.W.S. The Special One 11:39, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions:

Expand Synopsis/Plot section
Is this "The entire film crew were in tears while shooting a scene where Mr Lim beats Chengcai up because he is unable to express his love for him." necessary?
"stated that they relished the challenge of playing roles which were distinct from those in the first film." I assumed you meant the first film and changed it so.
"but found them quite responsive after giving them simple instructions and praising them for a good take." Necessary? Why was it difficult to work with them? Provide a citation.
"according to the law" - which is????
"While tutoring his children, Mr. Yeo tells Jerry that people will pay $500 for an hour of his time. Jerry's teacher encourages the boy to ask his parents to attend his concert, and later Jerry starts saving, apparently to buy Pokemon cards." - Please clarify wha tis going on here.
"going according to the law" -- which means ...?
"Following its success in Singapore, the film was screened in Malaysia (starting March 9) and Hong Kong (starting 22 June)."" of what year?

--Charleenmerced ^Talk 06:25, 6 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]