Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Requests/Armenian Revolutionary Federation

Copyedited by Finetooth (talk), a member of the Guild of Copy Editors, on 19:24, 14 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Proofread by SlackerMom (talk)18:38, 16 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I and another editor have built up this article from scratch over the last few months. It is now very well researched and cited and i'm thinking of nominating it for FA in the near future. However, since I am not a native speaker of English, I believe it needs help on copyediting for grammar and possibly neutrality. Any help will be very much appreciated. Thanks. - Fedayee 22:36, 4 March 2007 (UTC),[reply]
I found no serious grammar problems, and my fixes were mainly aimed at improving clarity. Please double-check my changes to the section called Exile, in which I found the church split confusing. I knew absolutely nothing about this church until reading this article and subsequently Googling a bit. Perhaps another sentence or two about church background here would be a good idea. As for POV, if forced to say whether the article is pro-ARF or anti-ARF, I would say pro, if only because the ARF is generally presented as honorific and working in the best interests of the Armenian people. I don't feel qualified to make substantial changes to the content, but I would suggest shortening the section called "Political philosophy and goals" by deleting the repetitions of general statements about social justice, democracy, and national liberation. This section in particular made me think of POV; it sounds a bit like a proclamation of "our goals" rather than ARF's goals as recorded by a neutral observer. Finetooth (talk) 19:24, 14 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Proofed, with very minor gnome-like changes. SlackerMom (talk) 18:38, 16 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]