Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Pete Doherty

Pete Doherty edit

What do you think about rating the article A-Level? What is left to be done? -- dreadlady 18:19, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou edit

In general a nice article. It is in GA level. I'm not still sure about A-Class. This is my review:

Expand the lead. check WP:LEAD.
You have the infobox without any pivture. This is not nice. I suggest you use one of the two pictures you have in the article for the infobox. Even the group phot, explaining that the one in the middle is Doherty.
"However, while post-production ... involved in other projects (see Yeti and Dirty Pretty Things)". This paragraph is uncitated.
I recommend when you quote something no to use italics. If you want to emphasize on a specific quote, have in mind that there is a variety of quoteboxes.
I think the "Collaborations" section is short. For sure, it has three stubby paragraphs. Try to make the prose flow a bit better here. With the right expansions of the content and/on mergers of paragraphs you can do that.
"left the band on at least one occasion[19] before returning intermittently." I don't see a reason you have the citation in the middle of the sentence and not at the end. Citate in the middle of a sentence, only if it is absolutely necessary.
"On New Year's Eve 2005, Doherty held ... leaked onto the internet. 31 March and 1 April 2006 Doherty was performing ... after he failed to turn up in January. For this occasion he produced at the suggestion ... a film with the title "Spew it out your soul". Citations needed.
"Most of Doherty's journals are freely available on the internet[1]". Citate the external link properly. After all, you can simply add it in your references.
"Albion and Arcadia" is too stubby. I don't see why it should be a seperate sub-section.
In "Influences" we read what Doherty himself says about his influences. But what are others (critics, musicians etc.) think about his lyrics?
"Awards" is stubby. If you can't expand it transfer the information in another relevant section.
You can't have empty sections like "Controversies and Legal Troubles". It does not matter that there is another sister article. Make a concise summary of this article here.
"The tabloid press ... Kate Moss". Uncitated paragraph. Personally, I donot also like where this section is placed. I would prefer it somewhere before "Influences", so as to be interconnected with his biography, part of which is this section.
Alphabetize categories at the end of the article.--Yannismarou 11:19, 25 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]