Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Pedro del Valle
Pedro del Valle edit
The editors would like comments from the group on areas that need improvments. Note subject can be controversial on his political beliefs.--Oldwildbill 18:49, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
Yannismarou edit
Nice article, but for FA it needs work:
- Some sections are really under-citated. Especially the section "World War II". 9 inline citations for the whole article are almost nothing. Try to have at least one (or more) citations for each paragraph. Subsequently, try to find more sources, so as to add more references.
- Some paragraphs are really small with one or two sentences. Some users do not like paragraphs with one sentence. And especially when a very long paragraph follows a very short one and then we have again a very short one, this does not look fine. Try to merge or expand some of your paragraphs.
- I am not sure if such a long quote is recommended for the lead. It is a laudation for Del Valle and covers almost 1/2 of the lead. But the lead is supposed to summarize the whole article. I'm not sure the lead as it is succeeds in its role.
- Inline citations go exactly after the punctuation without a gap between the punctuation and the gap. You have some mistakes. Sometimes you leave a gap; sometimes you omit the punctuation. Be consistent.
- Some awards lack the year they were awarded. Also prose is recommended by some users for these sections.
- Check a FA for the correct formatting of books.--Yannismarou 14:59, 31 August 2006 (UTC)
Plange edit
Besides the comments above, I would add that you should try and expand the lead to 3 paragraphs and it should be a summary of the article. For instance, there's currently no mention in the lead of his controversial ideas. --plange 01:49, 9 September 2006 (UTC)