Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Marjory Stoneman Douglas

Marjory Stoneman Douglas edit

Douglas, the proverbial little old lady who wears a big hat, pearls, and tells you to go to hell. The simultaneous Grandmother of the Everglades and Anti-Christ, depending on who is doing the describing, is a fascinating writer and environmental activist. I'm looking for input from other editors on how to improve the article. I nominated it for GA on the same day, but sometimes that process takes a while, so I'm hoping you fine folks can give me some suggestions to make that smoother. I appreciate the effort you put in reading the article. It was most fun to research and write. --Moni3 (talk) 19:56, 26 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Javascript review edit

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Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 100 pounds, use 100 pounds, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 100 pounds.^[?]
Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, if January 15, 2006 appeared in the article, link it as January 15, 2006.^[?] All examples of this are in the references so I don't know whether you want to bother or not.
Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “~~All~~ pigs are pink, so we thought of ~~a number of~~ ways to turn them green.”
- Avoid misplaced formality: “in order to/for” (-> to/for), “thereupon”, “notwithstanding”, etc.
The script has spotted contractions outside quotes: didn't, didn't, didn't, they should be expanded.

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 08:00, 29 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]