Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Madeleine de La Tour d'Auvergne

Madeleine de La Tour d'Auvergne edit

I am entering this article to be reviewed because I feel that it deserves a good ranking. I have many substantial changes to it, including adding important information with credible sources. Please treat it fairly; it took a lot of work! Note: this is the first article I have submitted for peer review. Ruby2010 (talk) 04:02, 15 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

Note: I'm not a member of Wikiproject Biography, but the nominator asked me to review the article. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:43, 16 October 2009 (UTC) Not being familiar with the specific article ranking system of this project, I won't definitively determine class, but by my own criteria the article falls somewhere between C- and B-class. Here are some specific concerns:[reply]

  • I'd say her marriage into the Medici family deserves a mention in the lead.
  • The article is rather short, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but in this case I feel it could be expanded.
  • Generally, month-day articles (ex. April 28) should not be linked
  • Any information on her life prior to marriage negotiations?
  • Most opinions are cited, which is commendable, but they should still be worded to make clear that it is someone's opinion (ex. "it was a great honor" -> "it was considered a great honor")
  • Should "La" in her title be capitalized or not?
  • Could use a few more wikilinks, but should avoid linking the same term/name more than once
  • Referencing is complete and well-done
  • Take a look at policies like WP:WTA, and make sure that the article is written in a strict encyclopedic tone.

Thanks for the input. I mostly just wanted to get a second opinion on it, seeing as how I was really the only person editing it and the fact that this was my first article submission for review. I'll work on making it even better. Thanks! Ruby2010 (talk) 02:37, 18 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]