Yazoo (band) edit
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Listing for feedback in terms of prose, broadness, layout/style and of course references. Intending to submit to WP:GA. Thanks — Wackymacs (talk ~ edits) 16:34, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
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Comments by Casliber edit
Cool, new Romantic music! I strongly approve of these sorta articles and will list some things. Naughty me has started copyediting, but really need to check comprehensiveness first. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:19, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
- Ok, first off, a quick scan through fails to find mention of their cool videos. I recall alot of bands really began to make alot of videos around this time and Yazoo was one of them. Mentioning something about who directed them and ideas behind them'd be good. I remember the monster one for "Don't Go".
- Needs to be at least a little info on why they got together and why they broke up.
- I recall Alf was particularly reknowned for her singing voice. Also was there ever any controversy about her weight? (band image etc.) I don't recall.
- Need to get some refs too. Also, any reflections from either Alf or Vince on the band from any interviews etc. would be great.
- Any expansion on the Yazoo naming lawsuit would be good. Pretty important issue.
- They were big here in Australia, any idea how they went in Europe and elsewhere? i.e. make the article less US- and UK-centric.
- Overview is a non-heading it means summary and the lead is a summary. Once longer it can be Formation etc.
That's what I can think of for starters. Once comprehenisveness and referenced, then deal with copyediting
- Thank you for your comments - at the moment, I am struggling to find reliable sources through the access I have (I am using http://books.google.com and also Thomson Gale Infotrac and NYT archives). Any idea on where some of the information can be found? (I also searched Billboard.com) — Wackymacs (talk ~ edits) 08:18, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
- Go to your local (or regional) library and have a look through old interviews in Rolling Stone would be a start. If it is a big library they may have a reasonably detailed archive. The city centre may have a big branch with bigger archives. Also, have a look under biographies. This is a key job of wikipedia to improve the web content by finding and citing off-web content. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:02, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
- Already had a look on Amazon and Google Books to find the suitable books but nothing substantial coming up except for books on Depeche Mode and Erasure, Vince Clarke's other involvements. My library doesn't have Rolling Stone archives (especially since this is the UK, and Rolling stone is a US magazine). Maybe I'll be able to find other editors who can get the sources needed. — Wackymacs (talk ~ edits) 09:58, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
- Go to your local (or regional) library and have a look through old interviews in Rolling Stone would be a start. If it is a big library they may have a reasonably detailed archive. The city centre may have a big branch with bigger archives. Also, have a look under biographies. This is a key job of wikipedia to improve the web content by finding and citing off-web content. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:02, 28 May 2008 (UTC)