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I've listed this article for peer review in hopes of ultimatly getting it to WP:GA status.

Thanks, Zackmann08 (^{Talk to me}/_{What I been doing}) 22:42, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The article looks in good shape. Just a couple of points:

"Frisby and McDonough moved the crew's vehicles to a safer location, which they were doing at the time of Granite Mountain crew entrapment": I'm not sure what "which they were doing" means; can you rephrase?
There are a couple of uncited sentences.
The comment about the Diamondbacks needs a date on it (when they started, whether they're still doing it).

I haven't looked at the sources in detail, but I saw no source issues in the ones I looked at. I think this would likely pass FA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 17:48, 29 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]