Wikipedia:Peer review/World Finance Corporation/archive1

This is an article about an interesting and largely forgotten scandal; I took it upon myself to write an article on it and its central figure, Hernandez-Cartaya (see the other Peer review request). But I haven't really gotten any feedback, and I think it is a rather good article, so... --maru (talk) contribs 23:33, 19 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • lead should be expanded.
  • Quotes should be cited
  • Per WP:MOS, the word "THE" should not be used in headings
  • Requires copyedit; the first sentence is grammatically incorrect because it shouldn't have a semicolon.

Thanks, AndyZ 02:28, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed the heading and intro, although I'm not too sure how to expand the lead. It seems to be a pretty fair summary as it is.
What quotes need citing? I was pretty sure I cited them all. --maru (talk) contribs 03:17, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The New York Times quote (even though it says New York Times, a citation should still be provided) and the one from the staff report. Thanks, AndyZ 20:32, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The NY Times one is now footnoted (the relevant article was already in the references section), and I've linked the staff report from where I got it- it was quoted in Kwitny's Endless Enemies; I haven't been able to track it down any further, to my lasting regret. --maru (talk) contribs 23:08, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]