Werner Heisenberg edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think is really complete, it contains an amount of information reallt difficult to find in the web and in general, so I want to candidate it as a Featured Article.
Thanks, José Miotto (talk)
- Comments by Sillyfolkboy:
- Just a note - The lead seems very sparsely wikilinked - Max Born, Pascual Jordan, Nobel Prize in Physics, Adolf Hitler , SS and Uranium Club should all be linked for example. On the opposite end of the scale, some parts of the body are heavily linked - such as the Uranium Club section. I think this is a necessary evil however given the number of physicists, scientific terms and german words linked. Don't link Werner Heisenberg in the text as this causes unnecessary bolding. Cheers. Sillyfolkboy (talk) 19:37, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Per WP:LEAD the lead should not be more than four paragraphs long. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
- The article has a lot of very short (one or two sentence) paragraphs which break up the flow of the article. These should be combined with others or perhaps expanded. See WP:Proseline too
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Why the lists of Internal Reports? Especially when the titles are generally untranslated - this is the English Wikipedia. Perhaps these could be slit off as a list - see the FL List of scientific publications by Albert Einstein for a model.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:46, 23 August 2008 (UTC)