Wikipedia:Peer review/Voivode of Transylvania/archive3

Voivode of Transylvania edit

Previous peer review

I've listed this article for peer review because it needs a comprehensive review by those who are not familiar with the subject. I am not sure its wording and structure are clear and comprehensible for our readers. Thank you for your time. Borsoka (talk) 13:24, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment, I'm gonna try and give the article a quick look-over.
  • Thank you for your review and comments. Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"But Leustach Rátót voivode living some years earlier was mentioned by a document from 1230", This line is confusing, it doesn't explain why it's relevant.
"The "guest settlers" at Boroskrakkó, Magyarigen (Ighiu) and Romosz (Romos)", what are "guest settlers", they are not mentioned anywhere else in the article.
"To judge legal cases of peasants owning parcels", I can't figure out what "peasants owning parcels" means from the text.
The large number of bracketed place names makes some sections rather cluttered-looking.
  • Perhaps, but the ignorance of one of the names would led to edit warring. Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Sections 3 and 4 jump from name to name very quickly, making them kind of hard to follow.
Section 4 doesn't explain all to well how the Voivode actually ended, I had to read it a couple of times before I got that it was because of a transition to being styled as "prince". It could definitely do with a closing sentence, since now the section just sort of ends abruptly. Devonian Wombat (talk) 12:13, 13 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]