Wikipedia:Peer review/Viki Lord/archive1

Victoria Lord edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because this fictional character is one of the few original characters on an American serial to be featured as a lead character for as long as it had been (from 1968 through 2012) and by an actor for so long (Erika Slezak, from 1971 through 2012). With such a distinction, I'd like to try and get the article up to GA quality.

Thanks, FrickFrack 18:10, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

  • "the role was originated by Gillian Spencer": I recommend "Gillian Spencer was originally cast in the role"
  • " first-aired" --> "first aired"
  • " longest-serving serial actors in American media": I think "in American soap operas" would be more accurate here.
  • "After Steve is put on trial and exonerated for the murder of Banner secretary Marcy Wade (Francesca James), and he and Viki marry in 1972.": Remove "and"
  • "Joe returns in-time" --> "in time"
  • The "Storylines" section isn't cited. It's not clear to me where this information is coming from. Is there any way it could be better-referenced? The same goes for the "Alternate personalities" section. I'm not sure what the conventions are here, but it seems we ought to be able to cite these recaps to some sort of book/article about the history of the series or the character.
  • The article is well-written. I can't find many issues with the prose. So that's a good start. I think the only trouble you might encounter with the GA criteria might be with citations. I would also consider including a section on how audiences have reacted to the character. How is she viewed? As a hero or villain? Also, we learn about the awards she's one, but it might be useful to have more context around the specific performances and storylines that brought her these awards. I hope this helps.--Batard0 (talk) 17:41, 23 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]