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Vidyasagar Setu

I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it to FA. Its my first FA attempt. It was listed GA back in 2013.

Thanks, ❯❯❯   S A H A 18:31, 1 September 2020 (UTC)

Aza24

I'll try and leave some comments soon. In the mean time you may want to list this article on Template:FAC peer review sidebar if FA is your goal. Aza24 (talk) 00:31, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Saha mentioned elsewhere that they are ill. Bst, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:40, 25 October 2020 (UTC)

Oh gosh that's awful to hear. Saha I will you a speedy recovery! I'll leave some comments below for you nonetheless, but of course no rush at all, health is far more important than WP :)

• link Cable-stayed bridge (in lead and first mention in text) and extradosed bridge – as well as Pandit in the first mention in lead and text
• It would be nice to get a year so the reader knows how old we're talking, maybe something like "Constructed in ____ with a total length of 823 metres (2,700 ft), Vidyasagar Setu..."
• The lead doesn't really explain the "corruption" issue – with the information given (in the lead) it could just as easily appear as negligence, could the corruption part be briefly expanded?
• link the first mention of Hooghly River in the text (same with Howrah and Kolkata)
• unsure about this one but you could link Indian National Highways to National highways of India
• Is there a reason he's first referred to as "educationist reformer Pandit Ishwar Chandra Vidyasagar" and then "Bengali educationist reformer Pandit Ishwar Chandra Vidyasagar"?
• I don't think "Noble Laurette" is the best way to describe Tagore, perhaps just "polymath"
• I would add something for Sister Nivedita as well – like "social activist Sister Nivedita"
• Hooghly River Bridge Commissioners should be linked in the lead and the first time in the text (at the moment I believe it's linked the second time in the text)
• Also since you already introduced the HRBC you may want to refer to them as the acronym for the second mention?
• link carriageways – link Toll bridge in infobox and first mention in text – link composite construction, girders, sheave, wind tunnel
• is "end piers" a common term? I would think "end of the piers" makes more sense
• I'm unsure what "MT" stands for
• "Post-construction scenario" sounds a little weird – maybe "Post-construction" would suffice?
• once again you can use the acronym HRBC instead of the full name
• you have the website and publisher for ref 3 but not ref 1 or 14
• missing retrieval dates for refs 9 and 12
• that's all I got - best, Aza24 (talk) 01:25, 26 October 2020 (UTC)