Wikipedia:Peer review/Ultrawide formats/archive1

Ultrawide formats edit

I've created a new article, please peer review it.

Thanks, Ne0 (talk) 09:12, 6 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Dialectric

Hi Ne0,

The scope of this article is challenging - according to the lede, it attempts to cover film, still photography, digital video, and digital displays. You may find it easier to improve if you narrow the focus. I see that this article started out as a table, so something similar to Comparison of display technology covering just wide formats might be a suitable restructuring.

1. Article Scope. Do you intend to cover photography? It is only mentioned in the lede, and the existing Panoramic photography may cover the topic adequately.

2. Article Scope. Do you have more references that specifically refer to all mentioned film formats as Ultra-wide or Ultrawide? Apart from IMAX, most of your references for films use this wording incidentally, for things like viewing angle and lens angle, but do not specifically describe the format as ultrawide. If you have trouble finding references specifically using the wording, you could run into problems with WP:OR. You may want to leave the film history to Widescreen and focus more on digital formats.

3. References. You make use of bare URLs for some citations. Full bibliographic citations are better. Per WP:CITESTYLE, avoiding bare URLs helps with verifiability and helps avoid linkrot.

3. Original research. Unless supported by references, some wording appears OR:

- using the heading “Widescreen revolution”, without a ref that uses this terminology.

- describing the 1964 IBM 704 mainframe display image as having a “TV display” when the same image used in IBM_704 is described as an IBM 780 CRT Display - ie. a purpose built computer display.

- “Before monitors became a separate product line, televisions were used as monitors.” is unreferenced and likely inaccurate. See Vector monitor and the discussion of the IBM 780 CRT Display at IBM 740 - there were purpose-built monitors for early computer systems, and some early systems had no displays at all.

If you have questions about any of these suggestions, please reply here. Dialectric (talk) 18:45, 10 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]