Turtles All the Way Down edit
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to see it reach FA status.
Thanks, TBrandley • talk • contributions 16:57, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- Don't think you need to link the word "drama".
Done
- Worth saying where "Global" is relevant to (I've never heard of it).
- Done
- "Episode" is mentioned four times in four sentences. I know it's about an episode, but this is dull prose.
- Done
- "a 0.9 rating " I (and probably many other readers) have no clue what a 0.9 rating is. Sounds either nearly perfect or rubbish...
- Done
- Where is the production code referenced?
- Done
- Infobox mentions Youth Lagoon yet this is not referenced nor expanded upon in the article.
- Done
- Where is running time referenced?
- Done
I watched the episode online, which told me it was 45 minutes. It is referenced to NBC, it could be referenced to the episode.
- "a temporary jail cell" what's that? a cell that later becomes a restaurant or a cinema? Not sure.
- Done
- "for killing Detective" really? or "accused of killing"?
Not done. That's what happened. He killed him, he was so mad that he killed his family.
- "He - his "red reality" self - lays down " en-dash, not hyphen.
- Done
- "e United States.[5][1]" normally expect to see refs in numerical order.
- Done
- Don't overlink Kyle Killen, and after his first mention, just refer to him as Killen.
- Done
- " in Awake' regular " missing something?
- Done
- "5.0 out of 5" not what the source says exactly.
- Done
- Don't SHOUT in the ref titles.
- Done
- Ref 11, use en-dash for year range per WP:DASH.
- Done
The Rambling Man (talk) 18:55, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
- Global is a Canadian network that airs this show. Thank you very much for this peer review. TBrandley • talk • contributions 21:57, 7 June 2012 (UTC)