Wikipedia:Peer review/Tsugaru clan/archive1

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to find out how it looks after a major overhaul, and how it can be further improved toward B class status.


Thanks, Tadakuni (talk) 22:58, 15 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The article is impressive, and the overhaul even more so. I don't know much about B-class, so I'll just suggest removing from the information box the explanation of the name ("port-lightness"). However accurate it is, a translation of individual kanji from a name is irrelevant. This one is likely to be the place name; many families adopted the name of their base of power as a surname. The place name may in turn be ateji, selected despite having no connection with whatever "tsugaru" means. All of this is of course speculation. In any case, I don't see any use for the information. There's also an external link to a site (Behind the Name) with no data on the name Tsugaru; it seems expendable.
In contrast, the main text of the article has a lot of valuable information. If I were involved in B-class articles, I'd look further for suggestions for improvement, but from my point of view, it looks quite good. Fg2 (talk) 10:16, 17 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the review; I've removed the translation but I can't seem to remove "Behind the Name." B class involves a checklist of attributes; I think that given your review and the associated corrections, the article reaches that status. -Tadakuni (talk) 13:57, 17 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]