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I am hoping for peer review against the featured article criteria and general review of the whole article by any editor. I've been working on the article for a while with a few other editors, but I'm hoping to get more opinions about the article. I am thinking to self-nominate it for FA status depending on how the review goes. It's my first PR and FAC, and my goal is to respond positively... please be gentle! -- cmhTC 04:42, 9 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I seem to remember trans fat being voluntarily disclosed on many labels prior to 2006. Am I wrong? Glenn4pr 09:55, 9 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that feedback. I have added to the article that voluntary compliance was allowed from the date of publication of the FDA rule. -- cmhTC 15:58, 9 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Overall I think this is an excellent article. Nice work! I have a few suggestions:
  • There are a number of inline citations throughout the document that precede punctuation, and should instead follow the punctuation. (C.f. Wp:citations#Footnotes) Some examples:
    • "...5% of total fat[4]."
    • "...benefit to human health"[1],"
    • "..."good" cholesterol) [2];"
    • "...nutritionally adequate diet" [8]."
    • "...same negative effects [9]."
&c.
"Done' -- cmhTC 23:27, 11 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • The first use of units such as kPa, psi and °C should be linked to the appropriate article.
"Done' -- cmhTC 23:35, 11 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Blended with unhydrogenated liquid soybean oil, the high pressure processed oil produced margarine containing 5 to 6% trans fat which could qualify for a label of zero grams of trans fat.[18]" Is this because the resulting net weight in the product is below 0.5 grams? I only discovered the reason after reading further. Perhaps this could be clarified?
Did this the other day -- cmhTC 17:50, 25 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • ...the amount a cell-signalling..." is missing an "of".
Done -- cmhTC 01:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • The abbreviations LDL/HDL should be written out on their first use, rather than assuming the reader is familiar with the terms.
I'd go ahead and submit this for GA status right away. It looks ready. Thank you! — RJH (talk) 16:05, 10 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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