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Total Drama (franchise) edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that it could be able to get more closer to the standards of Wikipedia but I just don't know how to make it happen.

Thanks, Rohedin TALK 15:35, 3 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: This is a show I have seen most of the episodes of. While this is a decent start, here are some suggestions for expansion and improvement.

  • A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - The Simpsons is a WP:FA about an animated television series and so seems like it would be an excellent model for this article. The Apprentice (UK) is another possible model.
  • I wonder if the title of the article is the best one - the article itself never refers to the "franchise" outside of info and nav boxes. Neither the 1st or 2nd season articles use franchise to refer to the series either. Why not call it Total Drama (series) or Total Drama (TV series)?
  • While the article needs to be expanded, what is there needs more references, for example the comparisons to other shows (otherwise they sound like Original research
  • My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
  • Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful.
  • The lead is not an adequate summary of the article (and will have to be added to as the article is expanded). I would mention the names (and link to) the series in the lead.
  • The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. As such, nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
  • I would try to add some History of the series to the article. Answer questions people might have about it - who are the creators, where did the show originate, who are the actors and other creative talent involved, what has each season been like, etc. See the model articles for ideas on what to include.
  • The good news is that both the Total Drama Island and Total Drama Action articles have a fair amount of this hisotry and background material
  • The article is so short now that there is not a lot else to say. Good luck and thanks for working on expanding and improving this.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 16:23, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]