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The Mauritius Command edit

This article has been worked up from being a short stub, separated out this entry in the literary series of Sea novels by Patrick O'Brian. I have reached about as far as I can with the material available to me. I now need new pairs of eyes and more period experts to look at it. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 15:27, 14 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please be gentle this is my first "Peer Review" request. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 15:29, 14 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It looks pretty good to me. I did have a question about which of the ships listed in the section 'Ships in "The Mauritius Command"' are actual historical vessels. Perhaps you could put a comment/explanation in that section? Thanks. — RJH 17:26, 14 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Done - to the best of my knowledge - If anyone knows of others add them in. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 14:26, 16 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

If I am not mistaken, two-sentence lead is usually considered to be insufficient. According to WP:LEAD: "The lead should briefly summarize the most important points covered in an article in such a way that it could stand on its own as a concise version of the article." Perhaps the plot introduction could be incorporated into the lead along with the first two sentences in "Major themes" section. --BorgQueen 18:08, 14 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

expanded the Lead paragraph to suit - although not with the suggested items. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 14:26, 16 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Well done. It looks much better now. --BorgQueen 14:30, 16 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not one to get overly technical — Good job taking a stub to maturity! is all I care to add FrankB 18:54, 14 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, get this done I'll move on the another in the series. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 14:27, 16 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Valuable information for inclusion into the article can include: over what period of time and where the book was written, where the novel fits into the author's career/life, critical reviews, and sales figures. --maclean25 05:52, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the observation - unfortunately I personally don't have access to any of the that information, any one who does can add it though. Thanks :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)} 08:30, 20 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]