Wikipedia:Peer review/The Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion/archive1

The Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion edit

I've been working on this article sporadically for a while, and I'm looking for some input on what else to do with it. --PresN 05:21, 25 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Krator edit

Big points:

Excessive use of quotes (like: "level", "Paradise", 'life', "sandbox", "leveled" and "Blood of a Divine") throughout the whole article. Things that have an unusual name (like level in Oblivion context) without an internal link specific for that meaning should be made italic (e.g.: level system), and those with an internal link should be not within quotes (e.g.: Paradise). Quotes from cited sources should be rephrased, or use {{cquote}}. The reception section is a huge clutter of quotes right now.

Done

The Overview section is just a pile of information stitched together. Move the first four paragraphs to a 'development' section just before 'reception', and the last two to the lead section.

Done

Section structure of the first few sections is confusing. Separate by world, lore, and story information, and Gameplay information. Move guilds a and playable races to setting, and write something about the gameplay. Check out Final Fantasy VIII, a FA, for a good example (though it names the section Plot, which I wouldn't do).

Split it up into sections, though I wouldn't call it done yet. --PresN 01:47, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Gameplay and Story need images.

Done

Smaller points/nitpicking:

Try to cut some information from the infobox. Long infoboxes are not well-read. Make the image smaller as well - consider having only the logo and name as image, and use the full box cover somewhere else.

Done

WP:LS. Lead section is poor.

Done, I think. I tried to model it off of Final Fantasy VIII's. --PresN 01:47, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Gameplay of the Elder Scrolls series shouldn't be a main article, but a see also.

Done

Guilds section is poorly written and unreferenced.
Story is too long. Cut non-essential information, or move to a separate article. A good way to do this might be to move the information to "The Elder Scrolls" articles instead of this one, like Cyrodiil.
Translation errors is a fourth-level section header, should be third.

Done

Reviews table is too wide. Should be half of the page (on 1024) maximum, and even then the column of text next to it should be made text-align:justify with a div.

I narrowed it, but I'm not sure what you mean by text-align:justify with a div --PresN 01:32, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Done Done it myself - see my most recent edit. Non-justified text next to a table is unreadable. --User:Krator (t c) 08:25, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, now I see what you mean. --PresN 15:26, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Downloadable is an awful neologism, especially in a section header. Consider rephrasing.

Done

Reorganise references to the official game guide. Twelve times the same reference is not good, I'm not sure how it should be done, but I do know that someone must have encountered this problem before, so a template might exist.

Done

Why are only wiki fansites listed? This is Wikipedia, not a guide to all wikis. List a few fansites (three or so), and leave it at that. If one of these happens to be a wiki, so be it, but don't make exceptions for wikis.

Done

I do not consider this done, really. It still lists these sites only. --User:Krator (t c) 08:25, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hashed it up again, only one wiki linked now. --PresN 01:47, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

--User:Krator (t c) 22:44, 25 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

PS: I would appreciate it the appropriate parts of this review could be marked with a {{done}} template, if any edits are made based on it, or made because of it.

Thanks! It has some pretty serious flaws, but they do get hard to see after a while. --PresN 01:25, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]