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Survivor (TV series) edit

In October this page marked for cleanup. Since then, myself and several other authors have revamped the text, moved entire sections to more relevent pages, deleted irrelevent and non notable content, and added images to make the page look more pleasing. I would like this article to be peer reviewed and in particular I would like you to look at the Premise section because it is lengthy and involved, and references. Thanks! Jtrost 00:52, 6 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

  • Too many "quoted terms". Maybe you can emaphasize things like titles and bold occurances of new words?
    • I took many quotes off of words and replaced them with italics. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • The opening "Premise" section could be shorter - it is very dense to read right now, with too many exceptions and examples. A brief overview of how the show works would be better. Perhaps move the Game Rules section up higher.
    • I moved the Game Rules section under the Premise section. I will start a new section on the talk page and see how other authors think the Premise section can be condensed. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sentence starting with "The Million-dollar" should be "The million-dollar". In the same sentence, a proper hyphen is needed.
  • The "final seven" image in the same section could be a little larger. Not sure about that table, either. A list would not look quite as nice, but both cause a lot of unused whitespace.
  • More later when I have the time. Turnstep 03:31, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Section headers should be capitalized correctly (First word is the only one to be capitalized)
  • The "Further Reading" section could be compacted a bit.
    • I took out a non notable promotional DVD, and since everything else was books I removed where it said Book before each item. I think it looks cleaner now. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • All links need be cleaned up (and dab checked). For example, "United States" is wikied on its second appearance on the page, not the first. Unlink lone years and common words. Perhaps unlink the people with no articles: if they don't have an article now, they probably will not in the future.
  • Needs a "See also" section to collect the related links, although this will add to the page size.
    • I changed the Million dollar winners section to See also and moved all templates that linked to related articles there. I also added two wikilinks to related articles, although I'm sure there's more. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the "Controversies section", the word "At" is a poor choice for hyperlinking. Perhaps a standard footnote format? Fix last bullet spacing in that section.
    • I added that to the references. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • The DVD releases boxes could be collapsed into one box to save room.
    • All TV show articles here seem to be dividing the DVD sections into complete seasons, individual episodes, best of, etc... I think this should stay to remain consistant with the other articles. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • - Turnstep 14:28, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I will reply to each issue individually above to maintain organization. Jtrost 20:13, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

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