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Suiyuan Campaign

I have been working on bringing this article up from start-class and I would like to get it to GA-class. Any suggestions, advice, or comments regarding the article would be appreciated. Romanov loyalist (talk) 02:25, 7 January 2017 (UTC)

Comments from AustralianRupert: G'day, thanks for your efforts with this article. I only have a few very minor suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 00:35, 8 January 2017 (UTC)

• is there a relevant page number or range for the Ruigui source?
• are there publisher/work and accessdate details for the "Suiyuan 1936: Images of the Anti-Japanese War by Missing Photographer Fang Dazeng" web citation
• I would suggest making the "Books" and "Journals" headers third level headers under a second level "References" header, or changing "Books" to "References" and "Journals" to "Further reading" (as it isn't currently cited specifically)
• the External links are slightly inconsistent in their format. For instance compare "TIME Oct. 23" with "TIME, Dec. 11" and "TIME Magazine, Feb. 12" etc
• there is one dab link that should be sorted: "Chahar"
• suggest linking "Kuomintang"
• currently the infobox seems a little lop-sided (i.e. the division between the belligerents which is usually in the centre seems to be too far to the left), is there a way to fix this? Possibly if you use break tags?
• instead of a largely empty "Order of battle" section, I suggest changing this header to "Opposing forces". You could still keep the main article link, but could provide a few short outline of the strengths and units etc
• some of the information in the infobox does not appear to be in the body of the article, eg. 45,000; 16,000; 19th Army etc". This could be included in an Opposing forces section if you chose to go down that path

Thanks for looking it over, and the other articles I posted on the military history assessments page. To address the points: with the Ruigui source I am not sure of the page number, it was used on the original article and they did not have any page number there. I don't have any way to access it and I do not know Chinese in any case. I added more details, including dates, to the photographer source, and changed formatting of the sources. I also changed the link names for the TIME Magazine so they are more organized and consistent. I specified the link to Chahar and linked to Kuomintang.

For the infobox, I am not sure what you mean. It seems to be in the center on my computer. I will also expand to the order of battle section and include some of the infobox information in it.Romanov loyalist (talk) 03:17, 8 January 2017 (UTC)

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. I'll do more copyediting if you bring the article to A-class review. - Dank (push to talk) 18:41, 8 January 2017 (UTC)