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Starrcade (1985) edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to receive feedback on the quality of the article so further improvements could be made and possibilities on promoting the article to a higher class could be considered. Thanks, 13 of Diamonds (talk) 13:27, 3 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Article is off to a good start but while it is clear that a lot of work has been put into it, some more is needed to improve it further. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

  • A model article is useful for ideas on improvement. There are 5 FAs at Category:FA-Class Professional wrestling articles and a bunch of GAs at Category:GA-Class Professional wrestling articles that should offer several good models.
  • Biggest problem I see is that the whole Event section has two references. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
  • The lead may need to be expanded - My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, but aftermath is barley dealt with in the the lead. Please see WP:LEAD
  • Watch for jargon - for example Flair formed the Four Horsemen stable needs to be better explained even in the lead for those not familiar with Pro Wrestling terminology.
  • Also make sure to provide context to the reader - my understanding is that wrestling matches are scripted (or at least the broad outlines and planned outcomes are). Can this be provided in some way? Why did the winners win and the losers lose? See WP:PCR
  • Refs would be better if more were from independent third-party sources. As it is many are from NWA and WWE sites.
  • Watch out for peacock language - try to make the article more encyclopedic in tone. For example The Four Horsemen became one of the greatest stables ever.[4] - perhaps According to source X, the Four Horsemen... Generally the examples themsleves prove the point - Show, Don't Tell and WP:PEACOCK
  • Per WP:MOS#Images, image sizes should be set at thumb to allow reader preferences to take over. "upright" can be used for vertical images to make them smaller.
  • Repetition error? Billy Graham defeated The Barbarian (with Paul Jones) is there twice - is this an error or did they fight twice (if second, make this clearer)
  • Article needs a copyedit - for example It was the first time an event was broadcast live from two locations. Really - in the history of the world and broadcasting? How about the Olympics? Or this is just a grammatical mess The following year's WrestleMania, WrestleMania 2, was created similar to Starrcade, being held in three locations.[6] Ask for a copyeditor at WP:PRV or ask one of the people listed at WP:LOCE on their talk page.
  • What about the next year's or next Starrcade? How did this one influence it in Aftermath?
  • Also what about Reception - were there any reviews or commentaries on the events? Was it a financial success? Any idea of ratings or viewers or tickets sold?
  • Please use my examples as just that - these are not an exhaustive list and if one example is given, please check to make sure there are not other occurrences of the same problem.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 21:17, 9 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]