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Spy vs Spy (Australian band)

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been rewritten from scratch to remove COI issues.

Thanks, McWomble (talk) 05:18, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, not sure what the COI was before. Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.

• Article needs a copyedit - just from the lead Initial line-up included the trio Craig Bloxom on bass guitar/lead vocals, Cliff Grigg on drums/percussion and Mike Weiley on lead guitar/vocals.[1][2] could be something like The initial line-up was a trio which included Craig Bloxom on bass guitar/lead vocals, Cliff Grigg on drums/percussion and Mike Weiley on lead guitar/vocals.[1][2]
• Any chance for some images? Perhaps a publicity shot or album cover as fair use?
• Article needs more references, for example the last paragraph in the Regroupings: 1991–current section has no refs. The popularity in Brazil material is also unreferenced. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• I would split out the discography as a separate article. See WP:Summary Style
• There are several places where dates / years could be added to provide context to the reader - see WP:PCR

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 05:26, 17 November 2008 (UTC)