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Sheffield

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I've listed this article for peer review because it used to be a featured article, and was removed in 2009. I've read through the article and personally, cannot see any issues. There was one citation needed tag, which I added a source for. I personally feel the article is ready to be a featured article again, but obviously I need some more opinions!

Thanks, -- Jack?! 03:04, 7 July 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Niagara

Governance

• "...gained the council from NOC..."
  • Spell out "NOC"

 Done

• "...during the 1980s administration under David Blunkett..."
  • What position did Blunkett hold?

 Done - Changed the sentence to make this clear.

Geography

• I'd recommend using {{Panorama}} for the panorama of Sheffield.

 Done

• "...across the city.[34][3]"
  • When more than one citation is used concurrently, make sure the are ordered from lowest to highest. ([3][34])

 Done

• "and, according to Sheffield City Council, it is England's greenest city,[37] a claim that was reinforced when it won the 2005 Entente Florale competition."
  • Sentence fragment, also it might be good to move this claim up near the claim of being the European city with the most "trees per person".

 Done - moved up to the section suggested.

• "...off NE England..."
  • Spell out NE; same goes for "SW England"

 Done

• "5,798,361 tonnes"
  • Link the unit,  Done also, see about providing a conversion to tons. ✗ Not done

Not completely sure what is meant by the conversion, or how I would go about this.

In short, the equivalent of a "tonne" in the US is a "ton"; one "tonne" is equal to ~1.102 "tons". {{Convert}} is able to handle this easily. ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​^{Don't give up the ship} 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

• Would putting the various historical populations of Sheffield into {{Historical populations}}, work better?

 Done - works much better

Economy

• "60 MW"
  • Link and spell out "MW"

 Done

Transportation

• "...city to London via the East Midlands,"
  • Is the emphasis on "via" needed?

 Done - no it wasn't.

• Is their a better photo of the Sheffield railway station? Frankly, I'm not sure what, exactly, it shows.

 Doing... - I will take a new picture when possible (I have just invested in a new camera). It shows the station at night, which is clear to me, but, understandably, not to others.

If you are not able to get a better photo, there are a some interior and platform photos in the station's article that will work just as well. ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​^{Don't give up the ship} 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

Culture and attractions

• "...a 24hr service..."
  • Spell out "24h"

 Done

Twin towns and sister cities

• Is their any particular reason why the flag of Kashmir is used as the identifier for Kotli, Pakistan, when the other twin towns and sister cities use a national flag?

 Done - I think this was because Kashmir has a strange political situation, but done, as it is part of Pakistan.

Understandable, I take it that this would be the same reason Kashmir is the only the political subdivision included in the list. ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​^{Don't give up the ship} 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

• "Two roads in Sheffield have been named after sister cities. A section of the Sheffield Parkway in Norton is named Bochum Parkway, and a road in Hackenthorpe is named Donetsk Way."
  • Use a colon between the two sentences, instead of a full-stop.

 Done

Interesting and well-written article; I could see this becoming an FA. Consider reviewing an article in the backlog, which is how I found yours. ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​^{Don't give up the ship} 00:53, 14 July 2010 (UTC)