Wikipedia:Peer review/Selena/archive1

Selena was a spanish singer who's life ended very short and since then she cult status in Hispanic countries. Selena is one of the best-selling hispanic artists of all-time. I know this article still needs heavy work, especially with refs and organization but I did improve it quite a bit and I'm planning to work on it to featured status. Let me place it on peer review first and I will welcome all comments to improve the article. Note I do need help copyediting the article. Thanks Jaranda wat's sup 01:05, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Expand the LEAD to three paragraphs, include after the first paragraph an overview of her life/career. Something like, "Born in X, she began her stage career at age X and by 19XX had achieved growing regional fame..." Also, the opening sentence has two mentions of "at the time of her death." Remove one. Kaisershatner 14:23, 19 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Per WP:LEAD it's two to three paragraphs, I got two and added a quick overview of her career on it so Done.