Wikipedia:Peer review/Sarah Brightman/archive2

Sarah Brightman edit

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I am considering running this through FAC sometime in the next few months (it has to be in a few months because she has a new album coming out and the thing needs to be stable first.) It's associated with the Musical Theatre WikiProject, and has gone through substantial editing. It's already been through one peer review, but I'd like some additional feedback before I do so. Thanks in advance. Crystallina (talk) 02:52, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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I don't have a firm idea how musician articles should be structured, but this one doesn't feel properly laid out. Perhaps that there is so much on career and little else. The section on music and voice is a good idea, but it should probably be broader and a greater proportion of the article. It should include more description of here vocal quality, acting ability, etc, such as the best reviews that cover those. Try checking the other FA's on musicians, find the best ones, and see if you can distill an improved layout from them. - Taxman ^Talk 19:43, 6 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- I'd love to add more to these sections, but I'm limited by what's out there as far as sources. I'll keep looking but there isn't as much information as there is for, say, Mariah Carey. Crystallina (talk) 06:04, 8 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]