Wikipedia:Peer review/Russian Roulette (song)/archive1

This peer review discussion has been closed.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to nominate it for GA status. I really hard worked on it, and improved it, from article in within 2-3 sentences from a section, to an article that kinda deserves to be chosen for Good. Also, thanks to the User:Pixelyoshi, who web cited some of the references. I would be greatful to the user that can peer review the article.

Thanks, Tomica1111 (talk) 12:00, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

Brief comments from Nikkimaria

• I did a bit of copy-editing, more is needed - GOCE should help with that

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 17:36, 4 August 2011 (UTC)

• "Its composition defines a different pace from Rihanna's previous singles." - what does this mean? Try to avoid vague and subjective statements, except for reviews

  Paraphrased Tomica1111 (talk) 21:23, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• "The song hqas a strong chorus and a bridge, which is pulled by strong vocals." - phrasing's a bit strange here, and "strong" shouldn't be repeated. Try to avoid excessive repetition where possible

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 21:23, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• Samples from copyrighted music should be no longer than 10% of the total song - given the length of this song, your sample should be 22 seconds max

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 09:38, 3 August 2011 (UTC)

• File:Russian_Roulette_video_shot.jpg needs a much stronger fair-use rationale. Try looking at music video screenshots on music GAs or FAs to get an idea of what's required here

  Changed it. I think that this is the right one... Tomica1111 (talk) 21:40, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• Try to maintain a neutral and encyclopedic tone at all times - see WP:TONE

   Done

• "the single is a bad Céline Dion song with barrel-turning revolver noises that actually sound like a can of spray paint being shook up" - is this a direct quote from the source? If not, needs to be reworded; if so, should have quotation marks

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 21:23, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• Use a consistent date formatting in references - either "January 1, 2001" or "2001-01-01"

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 21:23, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• Make sure all web citations have publishers and retrieval dates

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

• Try to make citation formatting consistent - similar sources should be formatted similarly. Nikkimaria (talk) 17:46, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

   Done Tomica1111 (talk) 22:19, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

Thank you Nikkimaria. I appreciate your review. You can now close it. Tomica1111 (talk) 17:18, 3 August 2011 (UTC)