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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because there are a few users who have expressed an interest in getting this to GA status and we'd like some advice.
Thanks, Spiderone 07:04, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
- Some of the references need formatting such as ref 23, 43 and others.
- I see a lot of match results in the article like 5–7, 7–6(6), 7–6(5), 3–6. Are all those needed? It seems to disrupt the prose somewhat.
- Make sure external links are not dead.[1]
- Cheers, MahangaTalk 14:46, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
- Even though I've edited this article I see some things that I know need to be changed but am not sure how to go about it.
- The "Equipment, Apparel, and endorsements" section is poorly written. There are too many numbers that to the casual reader are meaningless except as trivia. Is there some way we can incorporate these without making the paragraph look like a financial report?
- The giant blocks of tables that are the records and results sections. Something needs to be done there lest half the article remain figures that are again meaningless to the casual reader. I think, actually, that the entire records section could be removed to its page and be replaced by a couple of paragraphs which can then be incorporated into the Results section.
- The personal life and childhood section...yeah. There's not enough information to make separate sections as of right now, so it either needs expansion or editing, since it currently is incredibly fractured in the short paragraphs that have little chronological linearity.
I'll take a look at these when I have some time, but for right now they're just thoughts. --tennisman 23:05, 15 October 2009 (UTC)