Wikipedia:Peer review/Raising of school leaving age in the UK/archive1
Raising of school leaving age in the UK edit
I recently put forward this article for GA status (nomination), but it failed on several points. The most obvious one of which was the fact that it's a worldwide topic but it was focused mainly on the UK. I have since renamed the article to its current title, and made a new article using the original title, under Raising of school leaving age to handle the broader aspect of the topic. Although 99% of the content is what I have entered, I would appreciate some input (both in suggestions, or even better, contributions), to hopefully get this up the ladder to GA. There is a wealth of information on the latter section, although it was suggested that is needs tidying up, along with some other sections of the article. Input of any kind would be appreciated. Although not as important as the nominated article, if anyone has any information or suggestions they could add to the Raising of school leaving age article it would be appreciated also. Bungle44 15:53, 6 July 2007 (UTC)
- Your references need to be formatted. See WP:CITE for how. Dev920 (Have a nice day!) 22:45, 31 July 2007 (UTC)
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 10:58, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
I appreciate you taking some time to process that auto review, but I could have done as much myself. I was hoping that someone would give it the proper once over (as you admit the bot made a statement that was untrue). Bungle44 19:38, 22 July 2007 (UTC)