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Prison Break edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been reviewed the last time more than a year ago and it has come a long way. I need someone to tell me what's not very good about the article because I'm thinking of posting it to be an FA candidate.
Thanks, Diaa abdelmoneim (talk) 07:07, 1 November 2008 (UTC)
- The only thing I could possibly suggest for this page or a possible new Page, is a more in-depth guide to the episodes. it also could have a little bit more Information on the Spin-Off Section. Apart from that it is a very up to date, well detailed, well written Piece
by Cricket_boy27 (talk)
- David Fuchs
I'm basing many of my comments on comparison with Lost (TV series), a FA TV series article.
- You have the synopsis before production; on one hand, I kind of like starting chronologically with the history of the show's conception like in Lost, but if such a method sacrifices clarity it's best to keep it the way it is.
Done
- Convert the season synopses lead-ins to grammatical prose, please, e.g. "Season 1 begins..." instead of "Season 1: wasd..." et al
Done
- You should think about cutting down the character list to the essentials
- The ratings and release tables could be turning into right-floating tables to reduce the breakup of text.
- Merge, expand, or remove one-line sentences. Some of these just include rather unnecessary and unsourced trivia, e.g. "The last five episodes are the only ones shown on Hulu."
- 'Other Media' could be turned into 'Adaptations' and include the rather stubby spinoff section.
--Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 18:53, 12 November 2008 (UTC)