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I've listed this article for peer review after having completely rewritten the article. For a list of changes see Talk:New Wave of British Heavy Metal#The state of the article. The matter treated in the article has been discussed continuously among scholars and fans since the 80s, so I referenced as much as possible every sentence. I would like to know if this frequent use of references is compatible with a fluid reading of the article or is an insurmountable obstacle. I also need advice on grammar and syntax and on the sections sequence. I would be very happy to update the article according to everyone's remarks!
Thanks, Lewismaster (talk) 19:30, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
- Comments by Retrohead
- Can you lose the "or NWoBHM" from the brackets in the lead because it doesn't differ much from the first?
- Some sources (like MusicMight) use NWoBHM instead of NWOBHM, so I put in both of them. Trimmed down.
- Small c/e suggestion: drop "mainstream" from became international mainstream stars and "both" from both with live performances and new studio albums.
- Done
- Chronologically, I think the influences and legacy should read after the history section.
- I was unsure about this, but you are probably right. Moved.
- Just to ask, is Judas Priest considered part of the movement? I saw British Steel in the first wave (1979-1981) section, but is the band regarded as a predecessor or part of the NWOBHM?
- Judas Priest are not part of the movement, but the albums of many estblished bands like them received a boost of sales because of the NWOBHM. They were a major influence for the new bands.
- After reading the entire article, I can hardly detect some obvious abberation. In fact, this is very well researched and written in detail, so I suggest a GA nomination right away because the waiting line is immense.
- I'll wait another week for eventual new suggestions and then I will apply for GA. Thanks for your help. Lewismaster (talk) 17:47, 25 August 2015 (UTC)