Wikipedia:Peer review/Neurofibromatosis type II/archive1

Neurofibromatosis type II edit

Hallo!
This article is a translation from the german wikipedia. I hope to further improve the quality of this arcticle, perhaps to make a back-translation in the german wikipedia and I will finaly go on with other translations from the phakomatosis-group. Shurely I am interestet, whether other people think that it is "FA-material". Greetings -- Andy.we 10:08, 14 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like a good article, but understanding seems to require an existing understanding of medical terminology. I.e. to understand the article the lay reader needs to follow the various links. It's the type of article that could end up with a {{technical}} template. The article could use some slight dumbing down, or at least the addition of a few clarifying sentences in appropriate locations. Thanks. :) — RJH 16:01, 16 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

You are right. I didnt recognize it until now that it is very technical. A clarification will need reformulation of every second sentence. I will try to do that. Thank you. -- Andy.we 08:08, 17 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]