Wikipedia:Peer review/Maxillary central incisor/archive1
Maxillary central incisor edit
In the string of work of dental articles, this article has the most content about a single tooth than any other. I want to know what could be done to improve the language of the article (considering the specificity of the content) and what else may need to be added. I appreciate any feedback. - Dozenist talk 02:46, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
- For a read through this article seems in pretty decent shape, although it may be a little more difficult for somebody (like me) who is unfamiliar with the terminology.
- Right off the bat I think it would help if a simple definition was inserted as the first sentence of the article. For example, "Maximum central incisor is a tooth mounted in the upper jaw, or maxilla, of a human. It is usually the most..." or some such statement.
- The introduction is perhaps a tad too brief. Most reviewers prefer that it provide an overview of the article, summarizing the key topics. So possibly another paragraph could be added?
- The "Notation" section is in need of some citations.
- There are a number of terms that could do with a wikilink: mesiodistally, cervicoincisally, cingulum, labial, fossa, cementum, cervical, mesial, distal, gingival, apical, malocclusion. The existing cingulum page may need an addition.
- I believe: "maxillary central incisors [are] one of only two types"
- Is "greater deeper than normal lingual fossa" correct? It reads peculiarly. Perhaps "greater deeper-than-normal lingual fossa", but that's still not quite right.
- I hope this was slightly helpful. Unfortunately I'm not sure what else may need to be added as I'm unfamiliar with the subject matter. Thanks. — RJH (talk) 17:02, 24 January 2007 (UTC)
- Is there any connection with animal teeth in general? I could tell it was human teeth by the infob ox - but in the introduction would be good.
- There is a paucity of wikilinks in the later paragraphs - good to see some more here. GB 08:06, 30 January 2007 (UTC)