Wikipedia:Peer review/Malawi/archive1

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Hi everyone! This article recently passed a GA review, and I would like to see what more needs to be done before I take the article to FA review.

Thanks, Dana boomer (talk) 01:35, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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  • This article should be written in African English, not American.
    • I have never heard the term "African English". Wikipedia generally recognizes British English and American English. It is generally the preference of the main editor, although this can change depending on the subject. As I am American, I write in American English, and have a hard time finding words that should be changed into British spellings (not to mention my spell checker yells at me cause it thinks they're wrong!). I have had no other comments about the American spelling, so unless I hear more about this later, I'm just going to leave it as is. Dana boomer (talk) 19:57, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove the list of regions, as it creates too much white space. Try filling the section up with information on regional heirachy.
  • The axis on the graph in demography should be labeled.
    • They are, you just can't see them because the image is small. I could make it bigger, but then I'd run into issues with forced image sizes. I've added some information about what years the graph covers, so that should help. Dana boomer (talk) 20:21, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think there are some inline citations missing by just scanning it. My rule of thumb is to have one inline citation per sentence and to not have inline citations in the lead, because everything in the lead should already be mentioned below and thus cited.
    • Every sentence does not need a citation. Everything here is referenced (I know that because I wrote the whole thing), and each reference covers everything that comes between it and the preceeding reference. Dana boomer (talk) 19:57, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Places like the US and UK shouldn't be wikilinked, nor army, government etc.
  • The picture of the president should be in politics, not history.
  • If you can find any pictures of history, they would really help, but they're not a requirement for FA.
  • The map of regions should be labeled on its own description page, otherwise the numbers are useless.
  • (In infrastructure) - internet doesn't need a capital letter, nor wikilink.
    • Internet is actually supposed to be capitalized (it's a proper name, despite the way it is used in many informal settings). I'm on the fence about de-wikilinking it, so for the moment, I'm going to leave it the way it is. Dana boomer (talk) 20:45, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope that helps a bit!

I've added some of my replies above. I will continue working on the other comments (the ones I have not replied to). Let me know if you have any additional comments...I always appreciate the input. Dana boomer (talk) 19:57, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]