Wikipedia:Peer review/Machinae Supremacy/archive1

Machinae Supremacy

I've been working on this article for a while now, and appart from a few more sources and details in the history I'm unsure how to go about improving it further. Any feedback how how I might get the aricle up to GA status would be most welcome.Rehevkor 14:46, 30 July 2007 (UTC)

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• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?]
• Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.^[?]

•  Done. Removed dates and I believe any other links are already in context. Rehevkor

• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)

•  Done. Trimed down as much as I could. Rehevkor

• • While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 11 additive terms, a bit too much.

•  Done. Got rid of most.. I think. Rehevkor

• Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.^[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Davnel03 20:55, 30 July 2007 (UTC)