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Stable WP:GA rated article, successfully added as part of promoted featured topic, The Simpsons (season 9). Looking for any feedback on ways to improve this article further, and suggestions/recommendations as it moves along in quality status.

Thanks, Cirt (talk) 09:22, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Posted notice about this peer review at talkpages of WP:DOH, WP:TV, WP:US-TOON, and WP:COMEDY. Cirt (talk) 09:26, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I like this episode very much and the article is generally well-written, so most of my suggestions are going to be fairly nit-picky.

  • The article seems a bit short, especially if the ultimate goal is FA. Will mention a few places to possibly expand below.
  • Per WP:LEAD, the lead should probably be two paragraphs for this length article.
  • Perhaps The episode contains the last appearance of character Lionel Hutz.[1] would read better?
  • The image is great, how about the caption tweak Homer and Lisa listening to the song played by the Orb of Isis
  • Since there are 25 FA class articles on the Simspons, there are plenty of model artilces to look at. I picked "A Streetcar named Marge" (ah, alphabetical order) and noted it has a Cultutral References section, which seems like a possibility here. It also has a merchandise section (not sure that one would apply here).
  • Are the Nielsen ratings for the original air date available?
  • The Production section is a bit choppy - any way to introduce it with a "The production team faced several challenges on this episode..." lead in? Also is there anything on the music here?

I hope this helps - I can't think of too much else to add. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:46, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you I will try to look into these recommendations - though further expansion of the article may prove difficult as it has been hard to find additional secondary sources. Cirt (talk) 11:48, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Responses:

  • Perhaps The episode contains the last appearance of character Lionel Hutz.[1] would read better? -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The image is great, how about the caption tweak Homer and Lisa listening to the song played by the Orb of Isis -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The production team faced several challenges on this episode..." lead in? -- Done. Cirt (talk) 11:38, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hrm, not sure about Nielsen ratings, will try to look into that further. Cirt (talk) 15:50, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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