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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to make it a good article. Previously nominated for GA but failed due to poor writing quality. So the article need suggestions for improving the grammar, language and writing style.

Thanks, Charles Turing (talk) 07:05, 22 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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It stars Mohanlal, Andrea Jeremiah in the lead roles and Siddique, and Ajmal Ameer in supporting ones.

"It stars Mohanlal and Andrea Jeremiah in the lead roles, along with Siddique and Ajmal Ameer in supporting ones."

It holds the record for the highest opening day gross for a Malayalam film.

"It holds the record for the highest opening day collection for a Malayalam film."

Loham received mixed reactions from critic, who praised the lead actor's performance and the film's technical aspects but criticised its screenplay.

"Loham received mixed reactions from critics, who praised the performances and technical aspects but criticized its screenplay."

the film total gross is ₹13 crore (US$2.0 million).

"the film collected around ₹13 crore (US$2.0 million)."

I am doing a peer review for the first time. So forgive me for my mistakes. More suggestions to come soon. Thanks! JosephJames 03:57, 23 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]