Wikipedia:Peer review/List of songs written and performed by Avril Lavigne/archive1

List of songs written and performed by Avril Lavigne

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to work on eventually getting this to FL and would like some feedback for improving it before I nominate it. I'm particularly wondering if the lead should be shortened at all or if it's good as it is, and of course any other suggestions and critiques.

Thank you! Rorschach 04:01, 27 January 2013 (UTC)

I stumbled across this list on accident (I've never been to it before) and was impressed by the work, so I was happy to see it was up for peer review. I cannot give a full and solid peer review because I am unfamiliar with lists and what is expected of them in general, but I will say that it looks superb. I went through the lead and added missing quotation marks around song titles, and I find three column references difficult to read, so I changed that to 30em, which should allow the browser to make the decision for you.

I do, though, have a few suggestions.

1. In the lead: regarding the sentence, "She also worked with Max Martin and Shellback, who co-wrote all three of the album's singles." There is possible confusion as to who co-wrote the three albums: "both of whom", or just Shellback (the latter)?
2. The next two sentences after the above are, "She again wrote several songs with Evan Taubenfeld. Though he and Lavigne had been divorced in 2009, Deryck Whibley produced seven tracks on the album." When read linearly, the phrase "Though he and Lavigne" becomes confused with Taubenfeld. The last sentence isn't problematic on its own, but with Taubenfeld's name immediately named, that's who I thought the sentence was referring to at first. It would be more confusing (even if only for a moment) for someone unfamiliar with her marriage history.
3. In the list, I am not a fan at all of song titles that capitalize the first letter of all words. I lowercased "the" in one of the song titles in the lead, but I think you should go through the entire list and lowercase in accordance with WP:ALBUMCAPS.

I did not give the list a deeper look than this, so I haven't checked your citations or wikilinks or anything else. This is just to help you get going, and hopefully someone will come along and give you a deeper review. If you haven't helped out on other peer reviews, you should, as it's good etiquette to give just as much as you take ; ) I'll make more corrections if I see any. – Kerαunoςcopia^◁_galaxies 01:33, 9 February 2013 (UTC)

Oh, I did have one question. As I'm unfamiliar with lists, shouldn't this list be mentioned or linked to in Template:Avril Lavigne? Or is this not standard procedure? I only discovered this list because I was going through categories. – Kerαunoςcopia^◁_galaxies 01:36, 9 February 2013 (UTC)

Nevermind regarding the paragraph above, I see that this list is linked in the AL template. Just a quick glance, I did see some other things that need to be changed.

1. WP:OVERLINK — For example, every example of "Avril Lavigne" in the actual list links to her article. This goes for all the other names as well.
2. WP:ALLCAPS — Article titles in the References section (e.g., "VOA NEWS: JOHN LENNON'S MUSIC TO HELP DARFUR") need to be written and capitalized properly (use your judgment in these cases); also I saw the name PUFFY in the list and References a few times, he needs to be lowercased, no matter how his name is stylized.
3. Consistency — in the References, I noticed Discogs.com and discogs.com... capitalization should be consistent.
4. Typos — in the References, for example, I found Disogs several times (instead of Discogs). Also, it should be Discogs.com as the full name; Reference #75 reads "Playl Will Be"... is that a typo?
5. Work vs. Publisher — the website should always be listed in the work parameter. I found Discogs, for example, listed under the Publisher parameter a few times. The result is the website does not appear italicized in the actual References section, which it should be.
6. "O Holy Night" is missing an original artist, and the link does take you to the names of the composers. Maybe they can be listed?
7. "Fine" doesn't have a writer listed, and its link goes to [1], which I cannot access because I don't have an updated Flash player. Accessibility is not an issue, but good faith is, so I'm assuming its an interview with Lavigne where she mentions the song "Fine"... though I'm not sure in what capacity. "Fine" has been mentioned several times in the past. In the current Avril Lavigne article, the citation for "Fine" leads to a magazine interview. This is again another accessibility problem because I don't have that magazine, but I did find it (at the time) scanned and uploaded to Bandaids. "Fine" is again mentioned here (bandaids) during an interview on "The View"—I presume this is the TV show. Maybe you can hunt down a good source that says AL was in fact the author of this song.

Hopefully some of this helps you again (I had some time to kill). – Kerαunoςcopia^◁_galaxies 11:35, 10 February 2013 (UTC)