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List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Brett Lee edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on the list for the past couple of days and I feel it's currently in good shape and can be improved further. I want everyone's feedback on how to make this an FL.

Thanks, —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 11:36, 12 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comment

"Lee however, never managed to take more than five wickets in a single innings in any format of the game." His best performance in an innings in first-class cricket is 7/114: I think you need to specifiy "in any format of the international game." I'll try to take a further look at this later, feel free to drop me a message on my talk page if I haven't in a few days. Harrias ^talk 06:47, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks and fixed. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:24, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments

"A right-arm fast bowler, he has been described as "the world's fastest recorded bowler in modern times", along with Shoaib Akhtar." – This rings false for me: saying someone is the fastest, and then adding a caveat that it is along with someone else doesn't sound right. Also, I'm pretty sure Shaun Tait bowled faster. I would suggest weakening it to something along the lines of "A right-arm fast bowler, he was one of the fastest international bowlers during his career." You can still add the bit about Shoaib if you think it is necessary: I'm not convinced.
- I've re-written the sentence. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 18:23, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Lee made his Test debut in December 1999,[6] against India and his.." – Both the reference and the comma should move to after India.
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link to West Indies cricket team on the first usage in the second paragraph.
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"After having captured 310 wickets.." – Shorten to the much nicer "After capturing 310 wicket.."
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Add the "As of.." note to the end of the second paragraph for the "..and remains Australia's fourth most successful bowler in the format." statement.
- Added a footnote. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Making his One Day International (ODI) debut.." – Conversely, this would be better as "After making his.."
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
".. Lee's first one-day five-wicket haul came in the same series.." – Tighten this to clarify it was his first ODI five-wicket haul; he took earlier five-wicket hauls in one-day cricket (such as this match).
- This article is only about his International cricket five-wicket hauls. Is there a need to mention that in every usage. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Technically, the match I linked to was an international (albeit an Under-19 one!) Harrias ^talk 15:58, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:25, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link to South African national cricket team on the first usage in the third paragraph.
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Lee claimed 19 five-wicket hauls in his International career, and Australia had never lost any of the games on such instances." – remove "had".
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 4 needs a date.
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
As Brett Lee's Cricinfo profile is listed as a reference, you shouldn't include it as an External link.
- Pardon me, but I could not find that link in any of the references. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Ref 6. Harrias ^talk 15:58, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - Linked to CricketArchive profile. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 06:25, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent over whether you use ESPNCricinfo or ESPNcricinfo, there is a mix of both.
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 29 is a bit messed up; there seem to be extra brackets and all sorts. Harrias ^talk 09:49, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 15:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me. If you think I'm tough to please, you should try getting User:Sarastro1 to look at the prose! Harrias ^talk 11:42, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 09:54, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead image caption is somewhat uninformative, could you say where and when?
"has taken a number of" why not just say how many?
test is usually capitalised when referring to Test cricket.
"which Australia eventually won" any real need for "eventually"?
Mention somewhere he hasn't got a fifer in T20I.
" he never managed to take more than" -> "he never took more than"
Most refs are missing Cricinfo" from them (in particular refs 9 through 17).
"sinclair"->"Sinclair".
Dinesh -> Denesh.
Why MS Dhoni when all others have first names?
Same for RP Singh.
Sorting needs work, so sorting by best number of wickets should sort by fewest runs conceded second. Take a look at the coding in some of the existing FLs on "fifer" lists.

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:49, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. Fixed all! —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 05:50, 19 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comments

The venue column requires consistency, it's a mix of Stadium, City, City, and Stadium.
There are a couple of sentences that are a bit odd to read. e.g. "With nine five-wicket hauls, he is third overall in all-time ODI list." where an article before all-time would be nice and so on.

—SpacemanSpiff 08:16, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All fixed. —Vensatry _{(Ping me)} 08:39, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]