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List of feuds in the United States edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to get it to Featured List condition.

Thanks, GenQuest (talk) 22:15, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Lemonade51

Thank you for your effort. Much work needs to done before putting this forward for WP:FLC, but it's achievable. My main concern giving this a quick scan is that I do believe this may work/develop better as a ordinary article, not a list. Of course I do need second opinion on this. Below are some suggestions:
  • It is highly recommended not to introduce a list with "This is a list..." or "This list of Xs..."; check WP:LEADSENTENCE for more details.
  • No need to bold image captions, check WP:CAPTION for more.
  • There is one DAB (disambig) link, Neutral Ground.
  • MOS:LEAD (Introduction) could be bigger, essentially a summary of the article.
  • In Early-Hasley, remove the extra space between American Civil War and the comma.
  • Sentences such as 'He was having repeated run-ins with Drew Hasley, an older local citizen who had been a staunch Confederacy backer.' need a citation.
  • Ref 19 is not correctly cited. Check WP:REF for more details.
  • Where is the access date for Ref 18?
  • The external link, The American Storyteller 'Radio Journal' is dead. Consider replacing it.
There are more concerns (prose for instance) but this was what I picked up after a short scan. — Lemonade51 (talk) 15:54, 5 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your time. I'll work on your suggestions. GenQuest (talk) 00:41, 6 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]