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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this list to Wikipedia:Featured lists, but before that, would like this article to be thoroughly reviewed.

Thank you, DiverseMentality^(Boo!) 03:34, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

JD554 comments: This is looking pretty good and I shouldn't think it will take too much to get it through FLC. I have a few comments/suggestions:

It's greatly frowned upon at FLC to start lists with "This is a comprehensive list of awards and nominations won by Chris Brown..." Simply start with "Chris Brown is an American R&B and pop singer-songwriter..."
Done.
Don't overlink. One example I've seen is Billboard Hot 100 which is linked twice in the first paragraph. There may be others examples.
Whoops, I usually don't overlink, fixed.
RIAA should be Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) the first time and just RIAA subsequently. There are other examples of this such as Black Entertainment Television (BET).
Done.
A re-release of the album, entitled Exclusive: The Forever Edition, was released on June 3, 2008. Could do with re-wording to reduce the use of "release".
Fixed, hopefully it's better.
There should be a space after reference #5.
Got it.
The album was certification double platinum by the RIAA. Should be "certified"
Fixed.
Use semi-colons between the different award ceremonies in the first sentence of the second paragraph. Eg, ...including Viewer's Choice for "Yo (Excuse Me Miss)" at the BET Awards, Male Artist of the Year, New Artist of the Year and Artist of the Year at the Billboard Music Awards, Outstanding New Artist at the NAACP Image Awards, Choice Breakout Male at the Teen Choice Awards... should be ..including Viewer's Choice for "Yo (Excuse Me Miss)" at the BET Awards; Male Artist of the Year, New Artist of the Year and Artist of the Year at the Billboard Music Awards; Outstanding New Artist at the NAACP Image Awards; Choice Breakout Male at the Teen Choice Awards... This is because the list already contains commas: ...Male Artist of the Year, New Artist of the Year and Artist of the Year....
Done.
No need for Overall in the last sentence of the second paragraph.
I've removed it.
After referring to him as Chris Brown the first time, Brown is sufficient the rest of the time.
Fixed.
Wikilink the actual award where possible. Just one example is Best New Artist, there will be others.
Linked.
I would separate the actual award for each nomination. Eg, In the BET Awards table Viewer's Choice should be listed separately for Kiss Kiss and No Air.
Fixed.
Don't wikilink common terms such as United Kingdom.
Yes, sir.
In the Teen Choice Awards section: ...as voted on by teens aged 13-19. Would be better as ...as voted for by young people aged between 13 and 19.
Fixed.
Expand IFPI to full name.
Done.
In the references you should only italicise when the publisher/source is a published source such as a newspaper, magazine or book.
Fixed.
Wikilink the first instance of the publisher source in the references. Eg, Billboard should be wikilinked in reference #1 and then not subsequently. The same for Allmusic and others.
Done.
Is About.com a WP:RS? (I don't know the answer to that one)
It should be, but I'll ask.
The publication date should come after the publisher/source if there is no author.
Fixed.

Good luck for the FLC, --JD554 (talk) 12:55, 28 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time to review this article. DiverseMentality^(Boo!) 22:16, 28 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]