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I'm hoping to get this to Featured Article status. I've put a bit of work into updating and expanding it recently, so any feedback would be appreciated.

Thanks,  Afaber012  (talk)  10:13, 24 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The article is in pretty good shape, and should not have too much trouble at FLC once what's below is fixed. Here are the issues I noticed:

  • The two later images could do with some better captions besides just the name.
  Done
  • Position could be spelled out in the table rather than having "pos".
  Done
  • The article feels like it's missing a couple introductory sentences; it just jumps right in to noting how many Australian players have played. Not sure exactly what could be added here though.
  Done
  • The paragraph on players may be better off merged into the lead.
  Done
  • I'm not sure if having a separate section for all-stars is needed, since there's only the one. Moving the sentence to the lead and highlighting the name in the original players section could be a better idea.
  Done
  • The postseason is something that you may need to be careful on. For example, I know Peter Moylan pitched in the NLDS last year, but he's omitted; there may he other people that were missed as well.
  Done - I've double checked this now so should be ok.
  • For the B-R refs, add Sports Reference, LLC as the publisher and have Baseball-Reference (.com if desired) as the work.
  Done
  • There should at least be one non-BR ref to help solidify notability.
  Done

Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:53, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I thought I had more of a chance to look at this now, but it turned out not to be the case. I'll get through those things soon. Thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate it.  Afaber012  (talk)  12:31, 4 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've addressed each of those issues you brought up, except for that missing intro point. The only thing I can think of to introduce is a brief history of baseball in Australia, such as: "Baseball was introduced to Australia in..." and "A national tournament was first held in...". How does that sound?  Afaber012  (talk)  11:49, 7 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That sounds good. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:04, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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