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I've listed this article for peer review because…

I believe it's got a shot to be a featured list, along with the first overall picks of all of the other major sports.

I want to know if it's got the "substance" to be a featured list.

I think that the intro especially needs reviewing, and hopefully there is enough material going into enough depth on the actual chart.

Thanks, See The Morning (talk) 00:05, 21 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Killervogel5

I was asked to review this list by the contributor who opened the review, and will do so per the FL criteria as requested.

Per WP:BOLDTITLE, no links in the bold part of the lead. Considering that First-Year Player Draft is not the title, I say leave the link and remove the bold.
"Major League Baseball's primary mechanism"→"Major League Baseball's (MLB) primary mechanism": If you are going to use this abbreviation, you MUST make this change to explicitly define it.
"assigning amateur baseball players, from high schools, colleges, and other amateur baseball clubs, to its teams" - remove commas after players and clubs.
"the MLB does not permit" - remove "the".
"so the draft order is solely determined based on the previous season's standings, with the team possessing the worst record receiving the first pick. If two teams have identical records, the team with the worse record in the previous season will receive the higher pick. In addition, teams which lost free agents in the previous off-season may be awarded "compensatory" picks." Each of these statements needs a reference.
Although only 2 of the 44 picks" - 2→two
The entire second paragraph needs specific references. That external link at the bottom of the paragraph has to GO. If that's your source, format it using Template:Cite web and put it in the references section. In addition, every reference that you currently have needs to be formatted properly using Cite-web.
Consider creating linked footnotes (see List of Philadelphia Phillies seasons or List of Philadelphia Phillies managers for suggestions on this). The current footnotes are unhelpful because they are static. In addition, notes have to be in their own section, not just at the end of the table.
Per WP:BOLDFACE, don't use bold as an indicator in the table. Use italics instead, or a different symbol.
In your footnotes, no space between punctuation and the reference that follows, per MoS.
This table absolutely has to be sortable if it's going to pass FL. There are no circumstances at all that would make it unable to be sorted.
If you are going to use the MLB navbox, it needs to have a link to this article. Otherwise, remove it.
Shawon Dunston's asterisk is in the wrong place.
I would replace the picture of Pat Burrell, but I'm partial because I see the Phillies' pictures all the time. Be that as it may, [this] is a much better quality picture.

I am watching this page and will come back from time to time to check if you need help with any of these items. KV5 • Squawk box • Fight on! 01:39, 25 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]