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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to improve it. In near future i will give this article for featured list.
Thanks.
--Neo139 (talk) 22:26, 10 October 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This looks impressive. I have a few suggestions for further improvement.
Heads and subheads
- To avoid repetition of "albums" in the "Albums" section, perhaps just "Studio", "Remix and collaboration", and "Live" would be better. Would it be possible to use "and" or "or" instead of the ambiguous frontslash in "Remix/Collaboration"? Are remixes different from collaborations?
- Changed Remix/Collaboration to Remix and Collaboration. About Studio albums to just Studio. I'm not sure, articles all have repeated 'album'. --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
Lead
- "They later recruited Joe Hahn and Chester Bennington... ". - Could you supply a specific year instead of "later"?
- Done Joe 1996 and Chester 1999. --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "They changed the name once again to Linkin Park." - When? Did these things all happen in 1996?
- Done Added date --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "The band is noted both for its blend of rap rock and alternative metal." - Delete "both"?
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "Linkin Park have released" - Should be "Linkin Park has released" since you have already referred to the band as singular in the opening sentence.
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "From these works, twenty-one singles have been released, with twenty-eight accompanying music videos" - Generally numbers bigger than nine are written as digits unless they start a sentence; i.e., 21 and 28.
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "They have also released seven video albums" - To avoid the singular-plural awkwardness, perhaps "The band has also released... " would be better. Then in the next sentence: "All of its studio albums... ".
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "All of their studio albums have been RIAA certified" - Spell out as well as abbreviate on first use; i.e., "have been certified by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA)"?
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "The band has achieved nine number one singles" - Maybe "produced" rather than "achieved"? Also, hyphenate "number-one singles"?
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "Linkin Park rose to international fame in 2000 with their debut album" - "Its" rather than "their"?
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "which reached #2" - Here you use "#2", but in other places you use "number" instead of #. I'm not sure which is preferred in music articles, but consistency is important in either case.
I'm not sure either. I will ask about thisDone. I used 'peaked at number two' --Neo139 (talk) 16:55, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- "Their next major release" - "Its"?
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
References
- Most of the dates are in yyyy-mm-dd format, but citation 2 has one date in a different format. Make sure the formats are consistent throughout the reference section.
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- Some of the citations are incomplete. For example, the "General" reference should include the publisher, Rovi Corporation, and perhaps the author if the author of the biography is also the author of the rest of the material. Citations to web sources generally include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and access date, if all of those are known or can be found.
- Done: added publisher, author and date where is possible. --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
- Citation 2 needs italics for The Times. Should Billboard appear in italics in other citations? Is it considered an on-line periodical? See Billboard (magazine).
- Done --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
External links
- Not sure you need to list items like the Allmusic site already linked in the main text, "General" ref, or the citations.
- Done. Deleted repeated link --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 23:21, 16 October 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! --Neo139 (talk) 01:03, 17 October 2010 (UTC)