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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to put it forward for featured article status and would appreciate comments on its chances of achieving it, and to have any faults pointed out.

Thanks, X201 (talk) 15:35, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Rhain1999

I think this article is in really great shape at the moment, and you've done a great job at maintaining and improving its high quality, but my main concern is the Reception section. Currently, it just seems to say "[x] said [y] about the game, and scored it [z]", without any real flow. It should discuss the separate elements of the game that received commentary (such as the technology, music, story, characters), and summarise what some of the reviews said about it (for example, see The Last of Us, Grand Theft Auto IV or Grand Theft Auto V). The score table to the right of that section is also getting a bit out of hand; perhaps you should consider cutting it down to about 10-15 scores?

There's also a few paragraphs within the article that only consist of one or two sentences, so these should probably be merged with other paragraphs if possible. -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 10:36, 18 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I see what you mean about the reception section. Rather than bend and shape the existing text to fit that style, I think it may produce better if I take the key points from it and then go back to the sources and write a new reviews section from scratch, based on that framework. - X201 (talk) 08:32, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I agree; that would probably be the best approach. Just as a note, I've had to re-write Reception sections a few times before, and you can find my method of doing so here (CR4ZE used a very similar method first, so credit goes to him). You should take a look if you're finding any other method quite difficult. -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 09:08, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comment by Gamingforfun365

What I would too like to suggest is that we some citations to the "Plot" section, especially for the cast who assumed their role models as characters of the game. They are unsourced, so it is unclear that they have done so. Gamingforfun365 (talk) 09:50, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]