Wikipedia:Peer review/Kirby (Nintendo)/archive1
Kirby (Nintendo) edit
I've decided to give it an individual nomination - suggestions of how to improve this? - A Link to the Past (talk) 07:05, 2 April 2006 (UTC)
- First increase the lead, as WP:LEAD suggests that the lead be at least 2 paragraphs long. The article requires references and inline citations (see WP:CITE and WP:FOOTNOTE). Thanks, AndyZ t 14:56, 2 April 2006 (UTC)
- Just some random comments:
- A screenshot of Kirby using his powers would be nice (a la Wario).
- Some of the body paragraphs are a little unfocused; one paragraph starts talking about Beam and then switches over to multiple abilities per power, then back again.
- A general description of the Kirby series would be beneficial, I think.
- On the other hand, the abilities and items (which make up a grand majority of the article) should be scaled back.
- Strange, there's no description of a personality anywhere?
- More as I think of them later. For now, though, class. Nifboy 14:13, 3 April 2006 (UTC)
- I think the entire ==Kirby's Powers== section should go. It's too crufty for an encyclopedia. Wikipedia isn't a game guide. - The Catfish 02:48, 16 April 2006 (UTC)
- Personally I believe that this page is due for another nomination attempt; it's developed into quite the article since the last time it was nominated. DisasterKirby 05:13, 12 December 2006 (UTC)