Wikipedia:Peer review/Kirby: Right Back at Ya!/archive1
I've added a lot to this article in the past several months, but I'm having trouble thinking of how to improve it furthur. I have the basics covered at least, but what else needs to be done to get the article a higher assessment? Ivyna J. Spyder 09:21, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
- I think that the Changes made in the 4Kids Version section could be integrated with other parts of the article. I also think that you should merge the Cast list into the character section as WikiProject Anime and manga states that people who do voices should be included in character sections. The image placement is disturbing the text in some parts of the article on the left margin. I think that the main characters descriptions could be more concise. For each point made for Kibry, for example, you need to reword it so that you get to that point and then move on - you need only to mention that Kirby is a baby once.
- Your prose needs working on. "Some plot aspects are changed or removed entirely" could be reworded to "There are plot aspects that have been changed or removed entirely" as one example. You have too many additives in the article. Use find and replace to search for them and remove them. Start with "also". The word also should hardly be used throughout the article. See User:Tony1/How_to_satisfy_Criterion_2a#Eliminating_redundancy for other terms like that. --Squilibob 03:22, 30 December 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks to much :D I'll definitely go with your suggestions. Ivyna J. Spyder 05:05, 30 December 2006 (UTC)